Damn! Sparrow beat me to commenting, and she stole all my good words. Bloody thieving Scot.
It's a formal challenge, of course it's flowery. *snort* I love pedantic Spike.
This is everything Sparrow said, and it's just gorgeous with both detail and undertone. Not to mention your ever-present ability with the movement bits. You really are wonderful at that.
One thing I noticed was the Sunnydale/NY Xander mirror. So often, he did something fundamental to the Scoobies' survival, only to have that basically overlooked or downplayed. I don't know that Spike will make that error, but I was struck that, once again, it's Xander doing the saving.
The minion fight scene was beautifully written. All of the chapter was, of course, but that particularly. It's so easy for me to visualize the action when you're writing it. *shakes head in envy*
The poem is lovely, but more than that, it was so easy to read Xander in and between many of the lines. I can see how you chose it.
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Date: 2007-07-28 07:09 pm (UTC)It's a formal challenge, of course it's flowery. *snort* I love pedantic Spike.
This is everything Sparrow said, and it's just gorgeous with both detail and undertone. Not to mention your ever-present ability with the movement bits. You really are wonderful at that.
One thing I noticed was the Sunnydale/NY Xander mirror. So often, he did something fundamental to the Scoobies' survival, only to have that basically overlooked or downplayed. I don't know that Spike will make that error, but I was struck that, once again, it's Xander doing the saving.
The minion fight scene was beautifully written. All of the chapter was, of course, but that particularly. It's so easy for me to visualize the action when you're writing it. *shakes head in envy*
The poem is lovely, but more than that, it was so easy to read Xander in and between many of the lines. I can see how you chose it.
All right. Stopping now. Well done, love!